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The Long, Slow Death of a Twenty-Something

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As Ben Baker approaches the end of his 20's, an epic battle between his inner-fanboy and his inner-douchebag begins to take shape. Torn between wanting to stay loyal to old friends and habits and the social pressures of appearing successful and popular as the big 3-0 looms ahead, it's a winner-takes-all battle that will determine what kind of a man Ben will be when the dust has finally settled.

Clerks meets High Fidelity meets a cocaine overdose.

Black Keys drummer Pat Carney provides the music.

Chuh chuh check it here:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yf6qgpHfxIU
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I will actually admit, it looks better than the rest of the stuff you've posted here.
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Growth.
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Damn, dude... no kidding. A few things felt awkward, but I honestly wouldn't mind seeing this.

Drunk, of course. But still. :)
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thanks, Bud.
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It's a pretty well done trailer. The cuts are timed nicely, the overall pace of the trailer is good, and it tells the story without revealing too much.

One thing I don't really like is the font choice. For your logo at the beginning, it's fine, but for the screens of text cut throughout the trailer, I would personally go for something simpler.

Just out of curiosity, what was this shot on?
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Ah, nice. The footage came out pretty good. From the wide DOF, I'm guessing you didn't use any lens adapters, right? Does it handle well in low-light? Does it allow for manual focus, or is auto focus only?

Sorry for all the questions, I'm just always on the lookout for decent cameras.
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We used a wide angle lense when necessary but that was only 4 or 5 times through the whole shoot. The cameras are powerful for what they are, though we'll probably step it up for the next one. They're like $400 a camera, so if you're shooting a feature, it doesn't get any better than that.

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That's a great price for what it's outputting. It might be nice to have a couple of those for smaller projects. Maybe I'll talk my guys into picking up one or two. Right now, my company is saving up for a decent RED ONE package. We just finished shooting the interviews for a documentary using two rental REDs and a Cannon 7D. We figure if we get the RED we can cut down on our own rental costs and make some money by renting it out to other people. I've priced out a RED ONE setup at around $45k (including the rail system, lenses, battery packs, HDDs, tripod, etc). I'm excited about the RED Scarlet as well. While it only shoots 3k footage, it's almost a fraction of the cost of the RED ONE.
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I'm...stunned. This actually looks like you know what you're doing.

Now I have to go outside and check if the universe is collapsing.
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Yeah, Larry - I was just kidding about it being terrible. :) I would actually give this a watch, 'cause while I HAVE given you endless amounts of shit over the stuff you've posted here before... this intrigues me, and as baghead said... the trailer is pretty damned well cut.

Plus, you didn't bill yourself as the second coming of Christ even ONCE. I'm proud of you!
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It's a cliche plot that sounds like it's quoting a bunch of other movies, but it's a shit ton better than anything you've posted before.

You should work on the audio, though. Between mumbling (my diction isn't so great either), rushing the lines, and poor audio recording, it can be difficult to understand the dialog. I don't know how to make the audio better--I've never made a movie or live-action short--but as an experienced consumer of such things, it's something I can suggest.

Other than that, it looks like with some visual and audio polish it could be a little indie piece that gets picked up at Cannes or whatever (seems like that's what it's striving to be). Especially the way the trailer was cut together, it was like it's striking out on the path of Once or Away We Go, etc.
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Deacon wrote:You should work on the audio, though. Between mumbling (my diction isn't so great either), rushing the lines, and poor audio recording, it can be difficult to understand the dialog. I don't know how to make the audio better--I've never made a movie or live-action short--but as an experienced consumer of such things, it's something I can suggest.
Audio is tough. You need good equipment to get good audio. Ideally you'll want a overhead mic to cover the room and a mic for each person on screen with dialog. And whenever possible, record into a mixer rather than directly into the camera.

Fixing audio in post is even tougher. There are some tricks you can do to help clean it up, but unless you wand to do some ADR work there's not a lot you can do with poorly recorded audio.
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Just finding equipment to record multitrack audio is expensive, too - even most mixers really only have one out port, so adjusting it after the fact is hard. I need to look into some decent multitrack recording hardware, 'cause just one channel's no doin' it for me.
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