It's a cliche plot that sounds like it's quoting a bunch of other movies, but it's a shit ton better than anything you've posted before.
You should work on the audio, though. Between mumbling (my diction isn't so great either), rushing the lines, and poor audio recording, it can be difficult to understand the dialog. I don't know how to make the audio better--I've never made a movie or live-action short--but as an experienced consumer of such things, it's something I can suggest.
Other than that, it looks like with some visual and audio polish it could be a little indie piece that gets picked up at Cannes or whatever (seems like that's what it's striving to be). Especially the way the trailer was cut together, it was like it's striking out on the path of
Once or
Away We Go, etc.
Eric (the Deacon remix)
The follies which a man regrets the most in his life are those which he didn't commit when he had the opportunity. - Helen Rowland, A Guide to Men, 1922