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Haikus!

Post by Soul_Harvester » Sat Jun 14, 2003 4:36 pm

Anyone know how to write haikus?

They're small poems, three lines long. Five syllables, then seven, the five again on the last line. Usually about love or nature themes, they're easy to write and something to do when bored. Here's one I prepared earlier:

Make time for laughter
Joy must exist for us all
No time for regrets

Nothing special, but...you get the idea. Post away! Or...don't.

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Post by Beware of the Leopard » Sun Jun 15, 2003 12:48 am

Does this seem weird to anybody else?

I mean, we're lookin
down on Wayne's basement, only
thats not Wayne's basement.

Isn't that weird?

Garth... that was a haiku
"I think all right-thinking people in this country are sick and tired of being told that ordinary decent people are fed up in this country with being sick and tired. I'm certainly not, and I'm sick and tired of being told that I am."

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Post by Gathozar » Sun Jun 15, 2003 3:39 am

I enjoy Haikus
Except when they are stupid
And then they suck

Haikus rule!
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Post by Esvoiel » Sun Jun 15, 2003 7:31 am

whhat about " And then they all suck, to get the five syllabales?



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Observable house
but my bunny belies here
leaf frowns laughable.
wow. profound.. :?
Esvoiel Would like to take the time to appoligise for whatever he just said in his post.

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Post by Soul_Harvester » Sun Jun 15, 2003 9:39 am

RealLife Forums rock
Geeks of all shapes and all kinds
Billf bites the n00bs

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Post by ShinyWombat » Sun Jun 15, 2003 2:01 pm

I found these online a few weeks ago:

What if Computer Error Messages Were Written
in Haiku Format?

Three things are certain:
Death, taxes, and lost data.
Guess which has occurred.

Everything is gone;
Your life's work has been destroyed.
Squeeze trigger (yes/no)?


I'm sorry, there's -- um --
insufficient -- what's-it-called?
The term eludes me ...


Windows NT crashed.
I am the Blue Screen of Death.
No one hears your screams.


Seeing my great fault
Through darkening blue windows
I begin again


The code was willing,
It considered your request,
But the chips were weak.


Printer not ready.
Could be a fatal error.
Have a pen handy?


A file that big?
It might be very useful.
But now it is gone.


Errors have occurred.
We won't tell you where or why.
Lazy programmers.


Server's poor response
Not quick enough for browser.
Timed out, plum blossom.


Chaos reigns within.
Reflect, repent, and reboot.
Order shall return.


Login incorrect.
Only perfect spellers may
enter this system.


This site has been moved.
We'd tell you where, but then we'd
have to delete you.


wind catches lily
scatt'ring petals to the wind:
segmentation fault


ABORTED effort:
Close all that you have.
You ask way too much.


First snow, then silence.
This thousand dollar screen dies
so beautifully.


With searching comes loss
and the presence of absence:
"My Novel" not found.


The Tao that is seen
Is not the true Tao, until
You bring fresh toner.


The Web site you seek
cannot be located but
endless others exist


Stay the patient course
Of little worth is your ire
The network is down


A crash reduces
your expensive computer
to a simple stone.


There is a chasm
of carbon and silicon
the software can't bridge


Yesterday it worked
Today it is not working
Windows is like that


To have no errors
Would be life without meaning
No struggle, no joy


You step in the stream,
but the water has moved on.
This page is not here.


No keyboard present
Hit F1 to continue
Zen engineering?


Hal, open the file
Hal, open the damn file, Hal
open the file, Hal.


Out of memory.
We wish to hold the whole sky,
But we never will.


Having been erased,
The document you're seeking
Must now be retyped.


The ten thousand things
How long do any persist?
Netscape, too, has gone.


Rather than a beep
Or a rude error message,
These words: "File not found."


Serious error.
All shortcuts have disappeared.
Screen. Mind. Both are blank.
"So comes snow after fire, and even dragons have their ending!"
-Bilbo Baggins, The Hobbit

Holder of a coveted Lithium Flower No-Rape-For-Life pass...

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Post by OperatorGlyph » Sun Jun 15, 2003 2:28 pm

Here are a few that I had to write for school:

Deep into nightmares
I fall through a twisted mind-
Darkness shall keep me

The sting of salt tears
Flows over wounds thick with blood
But I run in vain

Inside, dark things sleep
Within a big heart of gold
Waiting to emerge

Perhaps when I cry
Someone somewhere is laughing
At my sad expense
"Perhaps when I cry
Someone somewhere is laughing
At my sad expense"

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Post by Soul_Harvester » Sun Jun 15, 2003 3:53 pm

Those are hilarious, ShinyWombat! :D

Good shit, OperatorGlyph...very soulful. I like! :mrgreen:

And now, one from me:

Life has passed you by
Nothing left to do but weep
Clinging to the past

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Post by Gathozar » Sun Jun 15, 2003 5:51 pm

I made a typo
For that I am so sorry
I'll be more careful
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let's see what i can do

Post by grandjoke » Sun Jun 15, 2003 9:57 pm

my turn

enter the darkness
i am broken deep inside
apathy i feign

who is to say why
the burning continues so
a fire inside

tell me how it feels
to be real and so alive
my bubble must burst

can you feel the cold?
chilling your bones to the core
it's simply too much

try to understand
my total misanthropy
i cannont be hurt

the deepest of eyes
i drown when i gaze in them
how can you be real

tonight i'm alone
the same thing as tomorow
here inside my thoughts

time cant erase this
the wound will linger for life
a dream that has died

oh music my sweet
why do you hurt me so much
too many barre chords!

warped tour oh warped tour
i deeply want to rock out
stupid vacation

haiku, you gotta love it. it's short yet expreses things quite nicely and no rhymes
I can count to purple backwards!

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Post by OperatorGlyph » Mon Jun 16, 2003 2:12 am

Hey grandjoke, that was a nice haiku about barre chords! I know EXACTLY what it is like! My hands are so small that it becomes difficult to play all the songs that I wish to play.
"Perhaps when I cry
Someone somewhere is laughing
At my sad expense"

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Post by Soul_Harvester » Mon Jun 16, 2003 4:40 am

Damn....theres alot of talent around these forums...

And here's none of it:

Smiling back at me
Your eyes like pools of moonlight
Eternal soul mates

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Post by Chaotic Matter » Mon Jun 16, 2003 4:55 am

Pocky is quite good
My teammates are idiots
Poodles piss me off.

Haiku by Nic by Jess by AL
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Post by grandjoke » Mon Jun 16, 2003 6:59 pm

i'm feeling creative so i'll try some more

stupid people suck
their idiocy invades
my mind is numbing

imagine you're six
you're on top of the garage
you leap and dont fly

open up, break down
reality crashes through
flight's imposible
I can count to purple backwards!

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Post by Gathozar » Mon Jun 16, 2003 10:42 pm

I think these are fun
Haikus are probably old.
But I do not care.
Aloha!

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